Talk:Glowhog/@comment-108.88.236.199-20140213011732

The bio is lacking in actually making sense. Add more detail, do a grammar check, think out his backstory completely, ''do a grammar check. ''Mostly make sure the whole thing doesn't need to be re-read four times to me comprehended. Like, why does the "evil master" turn his quills into crystals? What does this accomplish? What is he a "master" of? You can't really just be a master of nothing. I mean, heck, if you wanted, I'd be glad to rewrite his story to make more sense (with the original as an outline, obviously), or at least to fix all the grammatical errors.